TOEFL iBT Independent Writing
Sample Essay 2.
This is an
actual essay written by one of your classmates. It has not been
corrected in any way.
Topic: 75. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The
best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many types to travel. University gives students some
opportunity to study abroad for short or long term. We can also offer
some trips through travel agency. I disagree with the following
statement that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide
because making a trip plan is very interesting. In addition, we can go
anywhere we want and try my foreign language.
Firstly, we can make a plan if we travel by
ourselves. If we travel with tour guide, the plan has already decided
so that we just follow the plan. It is really boring; however, if we
travel by ourselves, we can make plan before going the places. We can
discuss which place is the most interesting in that country. Through
discussion, our relationship becomes better and better and we can raise
our motivation to travel.
Secondly, we can visit wherever we want. The tour
with a tour guide, the place where we visit has already decided so that
we cannot go freely. Even if there are any free times, it is kind of
short so that the range which we can visit is limited. However, if we
travel by ourselves, we can decide where we would like to the most. In
addition, we can change the plan whenever we want. If one of our
friends feels bad, we can change the plan and take a rest. It is the
benefit to travel by ourselves.
Finally, we can practice foreign language. Almost
all Japanese people learn English as first foreign language; however,
the opportunity to use English is very limited. If we travel to foreign
country with tour guide, we can try to use English; however, it is
really difficult to continue speaking English with many people. The
tour guide speaks Japanese. However, if we travel by our selves,
especially a few people, we can determine our mind to use only English
in a foreign country. It is very good opportunity to practice English
with no tour guide.
In conclusion, I disagree to travel with a tour
guide. If we travel by ourselves, we can make plan, visit any places
wherever we want, and train foreign language skill. It is difficult to
travel many times economically so that we should regard one trip as
very important opportunity to enjoy our lives. Trip by ourselves is
more enjoyable than the one with a tour guide. (403 words)
Task 1: Copy and paste this essay into
Microsoft Word. Identify the different parts of the essay and highlight
them using the following color code -
Background info
Thesis statement
How essay will
develop
Topic sentence
Support sentence
Restatement in
conclusion