TOEFL iBT Independent Writing
Sample Essay 3.
Here is a
very good example of a structurally excellent essay.
Topic:
Some high schools require all students to wear uniforms. Other
high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of
these two school politics de you think is better? Use specific reasons
and examples to support your opinion.
Some students still live with their family, where their mothers take
care of their everyday lives. Others may live at off-campus to enjoy
new freedom. However, I believe that it is a good idea for all
university students to live in a dormitory on campus in the first year.
In a dormitory, they can make new friends more easily, they can learn
to become independent, and they can spend more time on study.
Firstly, living in a dormitory on
campus would enable freshmen to make new friends more easily. Soon
after entering university, many freshmen may feel anxious about
their new university lives. To find new good friends would be one of
the best ways to adapt to life in a new environment. Living in a
dormitory would give them many chances to meet new people and make new
friends.
Secondly, living in a dormitory on
campus would enable freshmen to learn to become independent. In a
dormitory, without their family’s help, they have to wake up by
themselves, do the laundry for themselves, and take care of their own
food and health. Living in a dormitory gives students a good
preliminary training to standing on their own feet in the future.
Finally, living in a dormitory on
campus would enable freshmen to spend more time on studying. At
university, students tend to have very heavy workloads and have to
spend a lot of time on their studies. At first, many freshmen may feel
some difficulty to manage their time for studying. Living in a
dormitory on campus would be more convenient for study. They do not
need to waste time commuting. There is a library on campus. If there
are some questions, they can easily ask teachers on campus, or other
friends in the dormitory.
In conclusion, it is my opinion
that for reasons of making friends, learning independence, and spending
more time on study, living in a dormitory on campus would be better for
all university students in the first year. I believe that it would help
freshmen to start new challenging university lives.
Task 1: Copy and paste this essay into Microsoft Word. Identify the
different parts of the essay and highlight them using the following
color code -
Background info
Thesis statement
How essay will
develop
Topic sentence
Support sentence
Restatement in
conclusion